Screenplays - latest draft and version history is the current screenplay register and original PDF backup. Latest director-supplied draft: 24 October 2026,12:22pm,33pages. Use it plus later director feedback for planning. August and September sources below are retained history, not the latest script. Shared pointer: Production Records/Writing/Scripts/CURRENT-SCRIPT.json.
Core requirement for ALL Token POV production: the audience must feel physically inside Dex's eyes. Movement is driven by his attention, breathing, footsteps, balance and effort: organically glance, inspect, dip, hesitate, sway, recover and settle on something meaningful. A labelled POV that glides along a smooth path, floats independently, observes Dex from behind/above, or merely adds uniform camera shake fails. Head-mounted/GoPro/bodycam are motion analogies only, not instructions to add fisheye, action-sports styling, a visible camera, or move eye POV down onto his chest. Current director instruction takes priority over older static/smooth examples.
Childhood-memory treatment: director23October asksstrongerTRANCE:moody,sun-dazed,half-awakechildhoodperception, usingTake01firstfencememoryasmoodbenchmarkonly(notnewlock/inputvideo). Linkirregularheadattentiontobriefsunbloom/bleachedhighlights/focuslossandimperfectrecovery;constantwashandheldobjectdemonstrationarenotenough. Keepstylisedanimatedforms/materialsbutbackgroundmusthave3Dgrass/croplayerdepth,parallax,individualbreezemotionandairbetweenlayers,notpaintedwall/canvastextureormural. These are fleeting, selective sensory glimpses, not comprehensive environmental coverage. Feel more embodied movement while revealing LESS surrounding detail. Small hands, wood contact, a fragment of crop/field, Emris's guiding hands/indistinct original sleeve, lever and water are enough. Peripheral glare, soft focus and interrupted attention preserve missing details; avoid clean establishing views and prolonged object demonstrations. The eye camera can look down but never show the crown/back of the child's own head. Keep Emris barely seen. Match the locked film's actual texture/material treatment; generic hybrid2D/3D wording must not push toward a cleaner/cartoonier style. Preserve bright memory exposure without requiring excessive cartoon stylisation.
Take02 director rejection: aesthetically worse thanTake01 despite clearer mechanism. Road introduced in fence shot, green lawn-like field/crop uncertainty, smooth sliding rather than organic child attention, high external pump camera, visible boy head, implausible pump/ground attachment and somewhat excessive cartoon look. Do not treat agent64/100 as current ranking or approval. Revised visual suitability30/100, provisional and director feedback-led; Take01 remains closer memory-mood baseline. Keep mechanical lessons only, notTake02 as a global visual/camera reference. Script's fence flash says greenfield; later workingfarm establishes crops. Do not silently resolve that ambiguity by inventing a lawn or vast crop layout: limit background to soft established vegetation and verify visible crop detail against canon. Pump foot/ground contact must match approved placement; hide it naturally when the selected memory framing does not need it, never invent a mounting platform.
Revision11 PREPARED IN RUNWAY, director says wait for his generation instruction. Four reference crops now replace the earlier stack: Image1 existingYoungDex3.png arm/hand/shortsleeve detail, noface/bodycomposition; Image2 originalEmrisplaidsleeve, noface; Image3 native lockedporchframe480 road-freefence/crop/materialdetail; Image4 approvedK1Fpump uppermechanism,spout,lever, nofoot. Old3pov longforearms/steepdownwardbodyview removed as a conflicting compositioncue, not suitable childcamera evidence. Original assets untouched. Losslesscrop bounds/sourceSHA256/cropSHA256 and limitations saved, no invented/upscaledpixels. Crops lose wideyardgeography intentionally; establishedposition remains documented and offscreen. No rejected-take frame used as canon/input. Same unchanged approvedAudio1. Prompt11 readbackmatched, fourimage/oneaudio slots visuallyverified;12s/21:9/720p/Seedance2.5Reference/audioON/MOV actualcontrolsverified. Livebalance8978unchanged; estimate360credits for eventualrun, no livequote claim. Director subsequently explicitly authorised generation. Take03 submitted ONCE,23October2026 around01:38Sydney; provider third outputINQUEUE. Balance8978→8618,360creditdifference. Exactpromptreadback and4croppedimage/1audio/0video slots verified.12s21:9/720p/Seedance2.5Reference/audioON/MOV retained. Immutablepack saved Retrospective/Video Generations/Childhood memory pickups/20261023 - Take 03. Take03 nowCOMPLETED, downloadedoriginalMOV13,526,423bytes1470x630/24fps/289frames,SHA256ed7984a1d085b5f7927e20dd9dac0ef7b9ad7e8a7ea0c00b43e26b2b11a77270,full decodepassed. PreviewID3d5f91ef-2878-45b9-86e7-3330c09eeaa4,artifactcgt-20261022223849-f7ov2. REJECTED12/100 afterdirector saysphotoreal/nonPOV.48framesat4fps confirm liveaction-likewood/skin, side-onfinger andexternalchildprofile/head/shoulder in pump. Noqualifyingharvest; reviewstills remainrejectionevidence, nofinalpromotion. Original/prompt/refs/settings/provenance/review/catalogarchived. Take03review,vygorstudiosDrivefallback,readerVicVictoriouzgranted; audioNOTauditioned. Director subsequently explicitlyauthorises ONEreplacementafterdeepreview. Revision12 restoresactualfirstpersonreference instead ofthirdpersonarmcrop andadds4secactualcanonPOVvideoforattention/renderedsurface, pastsetting/workingpumpfromapprovedimages. Strongpositivepaintedanimatedfilmstyle first, simplerpositiveownhandsbodylogic. Expected420creditsincluding60inputvideo; no newArt/no rejectedvideoinput. Take04 completed, original downloaded and hash-archived:11,898,766bytes,1470x630,24fps,289frames, SHA25674befef8b6c9627484273b853af0e0ad1d35c4a159b796ce9290b2f59a60c15d, full decode passed.48frames at4fps plus native stills reviewed;38/100 provisional visual suitability. Pump grasp sits near upper linkage, no convincing full lever cycles, open barrel/short spout contradict approved capped working pump; right-edge ghost strip propagated from input video, floating specks and static backdrop remain. No qualifying harvested frames; review stills are rejection evidence. Audio not auditioned. Take04 original and visual review, vygorstudios Drive fallback with director reader access verified. Archive Retrospective/Video Generations/Childhood memory pickups/20261023 - Take 04. Director says first/fence shot now has sufficient options: STOP further fence generations; no individual file newly locked. All further work is pump only, with NO video reference. Revision12 input video andTake04 are quarantined from future inputs due edge artifact and wrong pump state. Revision13 uses own-POV appearance, original Emris sleeve, tighter clean canon vegetation detail, approved capped pump upper design and same-pump free-grip detail, plus unchanged approved voice.10s single pump shot, two readable cycles, hands at distal grip away from hinge, linked vertical rod, already-primed starting state, gravity water pulses and gentle leaf/grass breeze. Exact line retained. Director subsequently explicitly authorises ONE pump-only generation and asks shutdown after completion, download, review and archive. No automatic retry. Expected300credits without inputvideo; balance8198 before eventual submission. Take05 now SUBMITTED ONCE, provider fifth output INQUEUE,10s21:9/720p/Seedance2.5Reference/audioON/MOV,5images1audio0video and exact prompt readback verified.8198→7898=300credits. ImmutableTake05pack saved; completion/download/review pending. Take05 COMPLETED: original9,756,314bytes,1470x630/24fps/241frames(10.0417s), SHA25620528d62a4b7d66dd1db27c85d9f975509ecfcd54ed29cf7668fc77d43c76ab5, download/archive hashes match and full decode passed. Artifactcgt-20261022232421-360u8. Forty samples at4fps plus native3/6/9s reviewed;52/100 provisional visual suitability, NOT LOCKED. Right-edge artifact gone, own-eye body relationship maintained, covered pump/distal grip improved. Remaining: spout shortened/thickened, two clear lever cycles/rod causality unproven, hands too adult-sized, golden flecks and overly descriptive background, smooth down-look. No qualifying harvested frames; catalog/rejection stills retained. Audio NOT auditioned, no voice/music compliance claim. Take05 original, phone review. Director reader access and bytes verified. Local original, exact prompt/settings/refmap/provenance/hash/review/catalog in Retrospective/Video Generations/Childhood memory pickups/20261023 - Take 05. No further generation; first/fence shot production stopped. Creative approval remains pending. Complete Take05 archive,27,466,397bytes, contains original, references, exact prompt/settings, submission/completion proof, review and harvest catalog. Director reader access verified. Normal shutdown requested after safe archive and delivery; restart from this record. Creative review remains pending and active title preserved.
Pump-only comparative reassessment: reviewed all five archived reviews and resampled each pump section side by side; these are subjective VISUAL suitability scores for this shot, not whole-take ratings or audio certification. Rank1 Take05 52/100: clean edge and own-eye relationship, but short/thick spout, weak lever-cycle causality, adult-scale hands, specks and smooth down-look. Rank2 Take04 38/100: suitable painted direction/POV, but edge artifact, open barrel, upper-linkage grip and weak mechanics. Rank3 Take02 30/100: strongest readable pump silhouette/action, but external high viewpoint and visible child's crown fundamentally fail strict POV. Earlier pump55/overall64 review overvalued mechanics and is superseded for this shot's suitability; preserve it as history. Rank4 Take01 22/100: clasped adult-looking arms, obscured pump, glitter and weak action. Rank5 Take03 12/100: photographic rendering and external child. No take approved. All five pump shots comparison, director reader access verified.
**Duration/retry recommendation, not approval:**10s was unnecessarily generous for this fleeting insert; two cycles and prolonged water look overloaded the action. Recommend one controlled7s attempt only after resolving child-scale appearance vs first-person composition reference roles and exact pump shape/grip. One clear down/up stroke, water responding and a brief uneven attention shift, sparse background, NO video input. Target roughly3-5s selectable edit coverage depending on dialogue; final timing needs actual audio/editorial audition. No new generation authorised by the ranking question and none submitted.